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    dots Submission Name: Therein Wanderlustdots
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    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 75/182/217
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 971
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    Description:
       Willfully into the Surrender: Part I
    The Sycamore and the Willow: Part II
    Therein Wanderlust: Part III


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    dotsTherein Wanderlustdots
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    Wherever the mind wishes to walk,
    whenever whitewashed in morning light,
    it wove itself into the wicker and blinds
    of windowless rooms and wilting skies,
    shadows stolen by the widows web.
    It was how worthwhile dreams survived,
    Wrapped in memories that are wished and willed—
    Therein wanderlust.


    Waning crescent frown of the Moon,
    wrought from our wrath---the Wendigo,
    woebegone by the ravenous warped hunger
    the worshipped wail away with,
    into the woeful nights here.
    Perhaps it was---carved into the wrothful wood,
    written into the worthless flesh of,
    the sycamore and the willow.


    Whirring whispers of the reeds flow
    beautifully while waiting in the weeds,
    for a path through this weald.
    Whether the warmth of love,
    or the wrenching sadness that whorls
    upon a wayfaring world that wishes itself,
    willfully into the surrender.




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    ||| Comments |||
      The fawn memory's of an old house, with a wash of what has been. THe memory of mine too. It's almost tragic how they seem hunted .
    I liked how you have move more than , in your verses .The composition
    spoke in a more fluid way , grab at you and spun a tail . I thought of it more than expected ,thank you.
    Teika5



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