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    Author: Chelebel
    Elite Ratio:    2.14 - 51/166/172
    Words: 385
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    I cried today
    I thought of what
    we missed
    I cried for you
    There is no better
    In this.


    I suppose
    You wondered
    ' How in the hell'
    Did she crack my codes
    How she randomly appeared

    I don't know myself
    It just all started with
    Research.

    Yes we missed so much
    I left so much unfinished
    Your heartache was clearly
    A Missile without its toe and
    An Arrow without its bow.

    Thrown in loves direction
    With a Million miles to go.

    Casted out a decade ago
    Lost you thought forever gone
    The arrow swings back around
    A boomerang the universe rang.

    Hello my dear
    No I'm not near
    But your arrow
    Flew by
    in my minds eye
    And Now I can't
    seem to say
    goodbye.

    I have this bow
    I've had it for years
    Just lingering around
    its frayed cord
    Made me think
    Of my frayed emotions
    This bow lost its match
    It's been so depressed.


    Cause moments are never truly
    Cherished until they pass and then
    Your memory starts to beg.

    'Loser

    Lame

    Lamey LAMERSON '


    now I am near
    You tell me to leave.
    What should I believe.

    I know I'm not
    suppose to know
    But honesty is a virtue
    and I think I know you
    even though you say I don't
    I've known your heart for a longtime now.

    I just haven't met your mind yet.
    And it's possible you have hatred.
    If I could Time travel back to when we were kids,
    Slap myself in the face and say "see it;"
    I would do it in a second.
    With no thoughts
    no second guessing.
    It would be instinctive.


    Alternate realities
    Colliding
    Your reflecting
    I'm refracting
    Ultimately
    Collapsing
    Into itself.

    All things
    Residing






    I still don't ever want to hurt you.


































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      Can the end be any better together than this play of words.
    | Posted on 2016-01-13 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      This type of story is familiar. I believe for mw that is what I enjoyed about it.

    I can tell the story is a long one and the simplistic internal dialogue works for me. Though lengthy I can grasp qualities of the relationship such as the quirkiness of her and you for the attraction to that. I felt like I have been in both shoes, the lover and the one being endeared this way, from your description. You two must have had much in common and I am sorry for your loss.
    | Posted on 2016-01-10 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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