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Author: expiring_touch
ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 139 /260 /173
Words: 47
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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This much has gone, that much is clear,
your eyes gloss over mine,
my lips, and I keep
you like me.
I fling my hands about and raise
voices and talk mostly
nonsense ---
but so much rather ---
silence, tethered
to the edge.

Submitted on 2016-01-14 14:18:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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