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    dots Submission Name: After workdots

    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    26/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 136/243/156
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsAfter workdots

    We drove towards the weekend, and away,
    and talked insignificant things and even less
    insignificant people.
    Rain trickled down, mid-winter,
    curled the edges of my hair
    fogged your glasses, and I kept
    One stop more you’d glance to check,
    we’d say our good byes, hurry,
    before the doors

    Submitted on 2016-01-15 17:10:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really enjoyed this poem. I loved the imagery and how you allowed the reader to build their own narrative. Just enough detail; just enough distance. Thank you.
    | Posted on 2016-02-04 00:00:00 | by closetpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      There is a lot of life in this short and sweet write. I liked it. It was lively.
    | Posted on 2016-01-29 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]

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