Subside

Author: saartha ASL Info:    27/F/US Elite Ratio:    4.01 - 230 /393 /145 Words: 66

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Subside

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Listen, there is snow in the mountains and rain in the valleys. You can hear it from here, everything rolling over into sleep. It all wets down. I pace the room like an atom in an atom bomb but really, it's all gone a little mossy the way a gun looks in the forest one hundred years after.

Submitted on 2016-01-16 00:10:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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It rainsandrainsandrainsandrains, and after a while the ball that is not rolling gathers moss. But moss is soft, and green, and it is both nice to look at as well as to lie on. Things getting less volatile over time, has its perks :)

| Posted on 2016-01-21 00:00:00 | by BlankSheet | [ Reply to This ]

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