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    dots Submission Name: Subsidedots
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    Author: saartha
    ASL Info:    27/F/US
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 230/390/136
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsSubsidedots
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    Listen, there is snow
    in the mountains and
    rain in the valleys.

    You can hear it from here,
    everything rolling over
    into sleep.

    It all
    wets down.

    I pace the room
    like an atom
    in an atom bomb

    but really, it's all gone
    a little mossy

    the way a gun looks
    in the forest
    one hundred years after.




    Submitted on 2016-01-16 00:10:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      It rainsandrainsandrainsandrains, and after a while the ball that is not rolling gathers moss.

    But moss is soft, and green, and it is both nice to look at as well as to lie on.

    Things getting less volatile over time, has its perks

    :)

    | Posted on 2016-01-21 00:00:00 | by BlankSheet | [ Reply to This ]


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