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    Author: MyPeriodical
    ASL Info:    18/m/pr
    Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 288/229/264
    Words: 191
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
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       still mourning.


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    there has been pain in this home

    like a false accusation resulting in a
    forced confession

    and my sentence has yet to be overturned.

    there have been trials so trifle

    - being late to court -

    and others bludgeoning in their wake

    - murder in cold blood -

    although they were significant

    their dues have yet to be paid

    to this day
    the execution has yet to be made.

    these crimes come crimson red with a brilliant
    hue
    but the verdicts play no REASONable part...
    in HIS point of view.

    when my father sees me,

    he sees the decisions they've made

    and all the pride that he gave.

    i am left without the chances he had GIVEn to them;

    - the appeals to those criminals
    the breaks and the trades -

    there is no inward or outward...

    no bounds to be broken.

    i am the reflection of his pain
    and the unjust in his past.

    whatever governed his dreams back in those days

    has left since then.




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      I do not think it is too simplistic to suppose this a story of a son being coached by his father to accept a grim fate.

    The somber tone gives genuine feelings of shock and betrayal.
    In any case it would be unjust, the court room seems to fit the scheme.

    Maybe this is just a portrayal of that in life. Once the heart feels tricked and wounded this deeply a criminal sentence like you described seems the only solution. To have to bear the guilt and horror that it is by your own free will to comply, that is the twist in the gut.

    May I add a simple comment in response?
    We see dimly through a mirror. Let's not face reality with our own eyes and understanding.
    Thankyou for sharing.
    | Posted on 2016-05-19 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      Who is "he"? The post mentions your father... but it almost seems like he is used differently than the man you identify as your father. Perhaps it is two different people, but in a way, defining different points of view? Or different sides of a person that you know?

    At first it almost felt like a dismissal to appeal to ones judgement, but then you mentioned criminals and thought it seems to go further than an agenda of the courtroom. It almost feels like a complaint against the injustice of the justice system.
    | Posted on 2016-01-27 00:00:00 | by Lareth | [ Reply to This ]


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