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Submission Name: Lifes Haiku dots

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Author:	Forgiven
ASL Info:	38/F/Florida
Elite Ratio:	3.82 - 335/330/93
Words:	16

Class/Type:	Misc/Misc
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My try at a Haiku. I would love to see yall...lets do this

Lifes Haiku dots

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Life is a puzzle

and the pieces are misplaced

beauty's not entirety

Submitted on 2016-01-25 16:20:32 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Denise,

What you have here is actually a Katauta or a half Sedoka where the line measures are 5-7-7, rather than the 5-7-5 of Haiku or Senryu (which differ only by topics). No matter what you call it, I like the pared down, tight structure, and the thoughtfulness of the the poem and the way that last line just floats there, a bit awkwardly, but totally in line with the theme.
Life is beautiful, but can anyone say that it is truly complete? This is such a great meditative thought and definitely fits the spirit of the Japanese styles.

Thank you for sharing this.
Jan
| Posted on 2016-01-28 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]

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