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    dots Submission Name: Morning Frost (A Tanka)dots
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    Author: jaycee
    ASL Info:    44/F/ Texas
    Elite Ratio:    5.27 - 2626/1259/187
    Words: 21
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    dotsMorning Frost (A Tanka)dots
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    Nature's clock bids me
    come view her canvas anew
    white crystals glist’ning
    highlighted by virgin rays
    the sparkle of Winter's breath




    Submitted on 2016-01-28 16:25:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I hate snow, but I like this :)
    | Posted on 2016-02-17 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      I have been amazed by the frost of windows and trees lately. It definitely feel like a bidding of nature to look on it again.
    I'm unsure about the line "virgin rays". There may be a more effective and conducive wording for that. But overall I like this piece!
    | Posted on 2016-01-29 00:00:00 | by Anarius | [ Reply to This ]


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