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Morning Frost (A Tanka)


Author: jaycee
ASL Info:    44/F/ Texas
Elite Ratio:    5.27 - 2627 /1261 /188
Words: 21
Class/Type: Poetry /Nature
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Morning Frost (A Tanka)


Nature's clock bids me
come view her canvas anew
white crystals glist’ning
highlighted by virgin rays
the sparkle of Winter's breath




Submitted on 2016-01-28 16:25:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I hate snow, but I like this :)
| Posted on 2016-02-17 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
  I have been amazed by the frost of windows and trees lately. It definitely feel like a bidding of nature to look on it again.
I'm unsure about the line "virgin rays". There may be a more effective and conducive wording for that. But overall I like this piece!
| Posted on 2016-01-29 00:00:00 | by Anarius | [ Reply to This ]


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