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    dots Submission Name: Pieces dots

    Author: Chelebel
    Elite Ratio:    2.21 - 53/166/172
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    I am pieces of me
    And pieces of you

    Drawn between the parallel
    And congruent
    The adjacent
    And fluid
    Movements of tidal
    Waves we float
    Across the nights sky
    We've flown

    Wish stars traveling
    Through the Milky Way
    We have the lights
    Lighting the way

    Down the dusty trails of why
    Before the wonders were implied
    Before the light became the sky
    And the winds took flight

    Before the sun decided to share
    With the moon and all the others out there

    Before the gases
    Before the cells

    Before the membrane
    Before the DNA



    I am pieces of me and pieces of you.

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