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    dots Submission Name: how are you?dots
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    Author: vedanta19
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    how are you?
    asking, i felt mellow,
    and
    you splurged in self worth;

    i do wonder,
    how my love so precious, be so idle?
    so helpless;

    one day, in your day,
    one moment, in your moment
    you would leave,
    leave a decade and more of love,
    for greedy mortals;

    one day -
    when you face a soul-scarred mirror,

    apology unaccepted -
    by
    my wasted years, my feeble soul and my tired dreams;

    the greedy mortals -
    will have unaided, empty, wasted prayers -
    wishing death - every living moments;

    my God might enquire -
    how are you?
    me -still mellow,
    and

    wondering -
    at your bruised self-worth -

    so be it.








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      I realize that enigma's entity might not be worth all that much to you. But as citizen denizens it's kind of our duty on the manumissions to further the tenets of our constitutional fortitudes inherency as if they meant something to us. So no I won't apologize. I might be able to love you further though.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2016-02-11 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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