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    dots Submission Name: The dreamerdots
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    Author: Lareth
    ASL Info:    23/M/WA
    Elite Ratio:    5 - 103/139/48
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/BrokenHeart
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       Are my hopes and dreams to blame for my constant failure? Am I setting my standards too high? Am I simply unbecoming of my own self image?


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    dotsThe dreamerdots
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    Standing in the cut of moonlit grass,
    Breathing in the uncertainty.
    Sinking into the black morass,
    Dreaming for the rest of eternity.

    I see you, I reach for you,
    Yet farther you become.
    I will still search, this is true,
    I will reach for the woeful sun.

    The scars on my arm,
    My ugly past.
    Shall do no harm,
    From the iron cast.

    My chains of guilt,
    The bonds of shame.
    The dreams I built,
    Are they to blame?

    Can I not,
    Dare I see?
    My hopes are caught,
    In the sea of dreams.




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