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    dots Submission Name: Pax Romanadots
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    Author: MyPeriodical
    ASL Info:    18/m/pr
    Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 288/229/264
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Prose/
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    dotsPax Romanadots
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    you turn away
    like the back hand of God

    he, whomever
    beckons home a homeless man

    waving me forward;
    a bent palm dressed as a wagging finger

    the coconuts dangle from every branches end
    and strike the top of my hampered head

    one that feasts on forbidden treats
    soiled fruit from rotting trees

    is that who you're trying to be?
    the emperor to a dying land?

    tracing the circles of my dead crops
    lay the remains of my peace.




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