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    dots Submission Name: Weathereddots
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    Author: jaycee
    ASL Info:    44/F/ Texas
    Elite Ratio:    5.27 - 2626/1259/187
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 406
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 658



    Description:
       Form: Tritetra
    At least three quatrains of 7-7-8-7
    where the third line is Iambic Tetrameter with six words (two three-word phrases) that rhyme at the fourth and eighth syllable.
    Other lines need not rhyme.


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    dotsWeathereddots
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    Feelings grew shaped as weather;
    born in heady atmosphere
    of youthful spring, a wond'rous fling
    filling my heart with delight.

    Glorious cloud of cirrus
    sweeping across life's skies,
    fair-weathered wind, warm zephyrs send
    rapture blown heat through our nights.

    Yet clouds are wont to gather
    accumulate-- drifting low.
    A certain squall, a total stall,
    drenching torrent of goodbyes.

    Seasons perpetual change
    altered all dynamic climes
    in temperate thought, a rainbow's sought
    Spring's tears in summer are dried.




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    ||| Comments |||
      I enjoyed reading this, analogy of life to weather and the, unstoppable, changing events of both. Thank you.
    | Posted on 2016-02-25 00:00:00 | by closetpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      this piece really spoke to me. we are all rocks being tossed in the waves of life, and who knows how we'll shine for it? every moment, good and bad, is meant to polish us to perfection. i really like this. thank you for sharing.
    | Posted on 2016-02-25 00:00:00 | by gwenn sundala | [ Reply to This ]


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