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    dots Submission Name: Are you there God, it's me Jazminedots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsAre you there God, it's me Jazminedots
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    I am turning
    Blind as to where I will go
    My heart is yearning
    To do the good in you I know

    I am lonely,
    See we dont share any friends
    And though your love is boundless
    Sometimes I think with me it ends

    When I share you
    It seems as if thats where you stop
    Your words are on my lips
    And yet they are never given their fair shot

    They meet silence
    And eyes that look down on the floor
    Is it me? My impatience?
    A lack of faith in the power I have witnessed before

    How many personal victories
    That my heart credits your Kindgdom
    Will my story speak of you
    Or is this just another season




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      Don't feel bad, not all of God's servants are gifted with the convincing charisma of John the Baptist. I know as an agnostic I'm just one more of your friends who don't share your conviction but I believe in the message of your savior. I know you have received many strengths from your faith, don't discard them because of your failures at making converts. Be happy to live in the grace of this season, take joy in life's blessings.
    | Posted on 2016-02-23 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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