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    dots Submission Name: People like usdots
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    Author: OneDarkFlame92
    ASL Info:    23/m/Numeanor
    Elite Ratio:    5.28 - 457/422/225
    Words: 216
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 751
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    dotsPeople like usdots
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    Walking together,
    we were: hand-in-hand.
    In-hand-in-hand.
    They don't make us
    like they did once,
    people like us
    live,
    just a little heavier.

    We see trees a tad greener,
    but the leaves will stay dead,
    well into Summer
    where dying comes close again.
    They don't change much,
    to people like us.
    Who tend to see life
    right before the end.

    Hand-in-hand:
    they don't. . . care.
    People like them,
    people like us.
    We like to give up,
    right before the easy part
    where the tension is gone.
    The belts are loose,
    and we find a loop-hole out,
    because success scares them too much.
    That's how it is for people like. . .us.

    They scare me
    with their care free
    dead-end life philosophy
    and humor in glorified hypocrisy.
    Bunch of nihilists spouting Frankfurt-school and poetry,
    that they know nothing of. . .
    just to undermine thousand year old societies.
    And to what degree goes their wretched irony?
    Or what degree do they hold to speak of things?
    Or what degree is the angle of their backs
    as they inhale what they call "inspiring"?

    I broke away,
    from the people like. . .us.
    I no longer fit the mold.
    For hand-in-hand,
    in-hand-in-hand
    can no longer work
    with the way I now walk




    Submitted on 2016-02-25 00:17:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This kind of reminds me of 'of mice and men' which i find endearing.

    I think that as the poem moves on your segmentations/divisions could use some work but then maybe that's the point, things become confused, like at this site, and people like us move so far away from the people we were, are, wanted to be.

    I saw your journal and that's a bit discouraging. I find in life there is so little you can be in control of, perhaps there's little that's fair- and that's a fair assessment- but when i do slip over to your page for a read i find what i do read encouraging
    or at times i have taken great encouragement from your comment or the sporadic comment of others.

    Essentially i think this site is like a winter garden: gone all to seed, the ground is fertile it just needs a good hoeing.

    In all honesty i miss a more active ethos around here but i don't mind the quiet. Don't mind the quiet- grow what things you will.

    | Posted on 2016-03-03 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]


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