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    dots Submission Name: tormented addictiondots
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    Author: gwenn sundala
    Elite Ratio:    3.71 - 76/70/51
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Prose/
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    dotstormented addictiondots
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    asleep in my bed, asleep in my head
    i want this world to drift away
    pain and torment cradle me
    i beg the world, "take me away"

    asleep in my bed, asleep in my head
    i want this world to drift away
    nightmares threaten to overtake me
    i cannot speak, i cannot flee

    asleep in my bed, asleep in my head
    i want this world to drift away
    anything i do is too painful to bear
    even my love has begun not to care

    asleep in my bed, asleep in my head
    i want this world to drift away
    one more drink is all i need
    and these fears will wash away

    asleep in my bed, asleep in my head
    i want this world to drift away
    this fear, this dread, it's all in my head
    it's all in my head, it's all in my...




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