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    dots Submission Name: Magnetic Zeroesdots
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    Author: Chelebel
    Elite Ratio:    2.07 - 48/165/170
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsMagnetic Zeroesdots
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    My smile is my armor
    My love a shield

    You unlocked my subconscious
    And made me completely revealed.

    Vulnerabilities create the beautiful
    Human qualities in the poetry.

    Lyrical works that unleash the fury
    of the minds need to proceed
    with continuity and fluidity.


    Poetry breeds
    Intellectual needs.

    Loveolution!

    I put my intention into sharing
    My poetry,
    With people who know
    How to spread the love.

    I want to heal you
    Bah da ba dah baa duh
    We are here to hear you .
    Bah da ba dah
    Heal you......
    I want to heal you...

    Magnetic Zeroes. .......
    Ba da bah da, feel you....
    I want to feel you
    Ba dah ba daaahhh


    HEAL YOU!!!!







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    ||| Comments |||
      LOL, the ending was really lyrical and magical. I loved it! It brought to mind some kind of psychic commercial with a cheap 90s vibe. It was quite funny how the love poem of the beginning turned into that. Very interesting write!
    | Posted on 2016-03-07 00:00:00 | by TheJadedCritic | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm touched.
    | Posted on 2016-02-26 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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