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    dots Submission Name: Old Excusesdots
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    Author: closetpoet
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 51/106/70
    Words: 45
    Class/Type: Misc/
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    dotsOld Excusesdots
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    Sitting quietly
    she worked her curls
    around frail index
    twist,
    untwist

    February sun
    slices through blinds
    drawn
    twist,
    untwist

    Watching particles drift
    aimlessly through
    back into darkness
    twist,
    untwist

    Shining purple
    through failed cover
    His reminder
    Unattended kettle screams
    twist,
    untwist




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