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    dots Submission Name: untitleddots

    Author: nikita2u
    ASL Info:    26 Female Wonderlandlust
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 404/396/239
    Words: 333
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    I swim around
    In circles,
    Endless circles.
    Until it is not I who is spining,
    But the world that surounds me.

    I wish it to stop, to take a breath.
    But if I do.
    It would mean
    My death.

    Submitted on 2016-03-02 02:07:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I wouldn't mind if the world spun wide and endlessly around me. Instead tomorrow I am bound to bring a bad bunch of songs together for a girl. Maybe it'll make her head spin, maybe it'll churn my innards. At the very least the kitty we'll be sitting will toss her cookies, she's been doing it all weekend -- she's quite the trooper.

    I'd like to turn her over,
    churn out a yelp of elation,
    have that moment of yearning and sating,
    learn something as though it were new,
    earn her authentic affection.

    Other words and verbs. (because verbs aren't words)
    | Posted on 2017-02-13 00:00:00 | by Outlaw | [ Reply to This ]

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