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    dots Submission Name: Signsdots
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    Author: Chelebel
    Elite Ratio:    2.15 - 51/165/170
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    A sign


    A sign please it's all I Need
    I have said this so many times
    All the signs are spray painted over
    With rusty holes
    Wind blown
    Contorted Metal
    Ripping from the concrete
    Beneath

    A sign please it's all I need
    This way I know which way to go
    I can see, I do believe.
    My faith it points me.

    A sign please
    I need to read
    I don't want to speak
    I just want to read


    A sign please it's all I need
    I know I will see if just placed
    So perfectly.











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      I really like how you are referring to actual signs on the street in this poem, and using that imagery to insinuate a deeper longing for direction, or perhaps a person. It is very adept, and interesting, but as a critique I would just say, try not to sacrifice the meaning of the poem for easy rhymes or even the rhyme-scheme as a whole. I feel like the poem didn't end as strongly as it began because it started to fall into more cliché and predictable rhymes, rather than stay focused on coming to a meaningful conclusion. Overall, great job, I hope to read more!
    | Posted on 2016-03-17 00:00:00 | by Anneboleyn707 | [ Reply to This ]


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