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    dots Submission Name: Home Invasiondots
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    Author: closetpoet
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 51/106/70
    Words: 12
    Class/Type: Haiku/
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    dotsHome Invasiondots
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    Quiet bedroom. Dark.
    He awkwardly rubs her leg
    Her eyes clenched, tightly




    Submitted on 2016-03-09 06:10:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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