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    Author: Narna
    Elite Ratio:    1.74 - 14/102/68
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Serendipity is serene pity
    in the plight of this place.
    We;
    A split-pea soup;
    I over hammed. And,
    all your heavy handed
    mastication
    did not help you swallow,
    My truth.
    In the flesh;
    Hung up to dry,
    curing
    nothing but hardened shells
    and get well wishes.
    We;
    Forgot ourselves in the depth of
    a shallow bowl.
    On the whole;
    I found myself choking on the
    tasteless reverie;
    and spitting a less contemporary
    future.






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