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    dots Submission Name: A Perfect Ending (edited version)dots
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    Author: kase
    ASL Info:    27, Winnipeg
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 169/398/234
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsA Perfect Ending (edited version)dots
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    Intertwined fingers, connected through the gaps of hands.
    Future promises of love and all it's master plans.
    The tide dampens the beachfront, the stars replace the setting sun.
    Lost in time; in this "forever." Our fairytale has just begun.

    I've wiped away your tears, as you caress gently across my soul.
    I steal flowers from the neighbour's garden, to prove my love for you is bold.
    Crying on each other's shoulder, forgetting and making memories.
    Kisses on the cheek as i asked you to marry me.

    I saw you walking down the aisle, accompanied by the biggest smile.
    Your grace and beauty radiate, stretching across for miles.
    Face to face at the alter, nervous... waiting to say i do.
    Then i awoke realizing i was only dreaming of you.




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