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    dots Submission Name: Friday Night Mistakes (edited version)dots

    Author: kase
    ASL Info:    27, Winnipeg
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 169/398/234
    Words: 208
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsFriday Night Mistakes (edited version)dots

    These girls just wanna party.
    But the choices that they make,
    Usually become the source,
    Of their Friday Night Mistakes.

    She asks me to refill her cup,
    While we pretend to be in love.
    She's never done this drug before.
    Yet she's already going overboard.
    Now her eyes are big and blue.
    And her body looks unused.
    I got her pleading on the floor.
    Contemplating what she's craving more.

    Cause these girls just wanna party.
    But the choices that we make,
    Usually become the source,
    Of our Friday Night Mistakes.
    And these girls all say they love me,
    As their hearts begin to break.
    So we numb the pain and ache.
    With our Friday Night Mistakes.

    Smoke some of this, do a line of that.
    Drink until you puke, and starve to not get fat.
    Now she feels beautiful and I'm so fucking high.
    So she does another line, and we fuck to pass the time.

    These girls know how to party.
    But all the drugs we take,
    Make time move in slower motion,
    As the night becomes the day.
    These girls all say they love me.
    To numb their own heartbreak.
    So they self destruct and celebrate.
    With me; their Friday Night Mistake.

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