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    dots Submission Name: Infinitydots
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    Author: kase
    ASL Info:    27, Winnipeg
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 169/398/234
    Words: 392
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 491
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    Girl are you listening? I asked "are you listening?"
    That pain that you feel i know is crippling. It's crippling.
    But there's a heartbeat inside that pretty little chest of yours,
    And you may not hear it, but I can feel it craving more.

    So baby take my hand, I want you to understand.

    So let, me, show you,
    All of these feelings you pretend you don't know.
    So let, me, hold you,
    Together we can make it down this dark road.

    I just want to show you, all these pretty colours! Girl I can show you.
    And we can go to all the places in the world that are beautiful, but you're so beautiful and these locations are few.
    So baby let me make sense, of all these feelings.
    And fucking repent, for feeling needy.
    I'll be your friend, if that's what you need me, to be.

    So please just take my hand, and squeeze.
    I need you to understand.
    Open your eyes and focus only on me.

    So let, me, show you,
    All of these feelings you pretend you don't know.
    So let, me, hold you,
    Together we can make it down this dark road.
    And all we need is, for you to press the switch on these lights.
    And once they're shining, we'll reflect some onto your life.

    Baby are you listening? I know that you're listening.
    Your eyes are glistening. The colours have your pupils vastly shimmering.
    Show me your heart!
    Take those empty feelings that you bottled up inside and exile them into the dark.
    And you can hear it now.
    My heartbeat is in sync with yours, and baby you look so damn proud.

    So she took my hand, and said "oh baby now I understand."
    She said "focus your eyes on me, boy are you listening?"

    And so she said:

    "So let, me, feel free,
    Express yourself with that body, and place it right on top of me.
    And we, feel, complete,
    Express yourself with those vocals and baby let it out and scream!"

    She said, she said:

    "And all we need is each other so baby hold on to your seat."

    She said, she said:

    "And if you're worried bout it ending baby we can put this night on repeat."




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