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Fishing


Author: Janesaddiction
ASL Info:    48/F/Somewhere on A1A
Elite Ratio:    1.93 - 8 /25 /20
Words: 27
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Fishing



Catch of the day,
desperate to feed her appetite

School of plenty
Shiny temptation
Hooks grappling

Plated up at my table...
She needs new bait




Submitted on 2016-03-15 12:14:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Is it me or are women the easiest to transform into poetry? Seems like every time I write about a man, it comes off stiff and somehow tasteless, but with a woman, it adds this...flare. Might be the way we look at things, but beauty's an abstract force that bears no witness.

I like the mastery you imply in her actions; as though there's a scheme to these things. The topic is interesting, the format is interesting...
Really got me thinking.
| Posted on 2016-04-09 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]
  ...she needs new flesh
as hers is stripped
from belly to back
the perfect dish

the baited barb
all shiny bright
loves who wish its sting
goodnight...
| Posted on 2016-04-04 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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