Fishing

Author: Janesaddiction ASL Info:    48/F/Somewhere on A1A Elite Ratio:    1.93 - 8 /25 /20 Words: 27

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Fishing

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Catch of the day, desperate to feed her appetite School of plenty Shiny temptation Hooks grappling Plated up at my table... She needs new bait

Submitted on 2016-03-15 12:14:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Is it me or are women the easiest to transform into poetry? Seems like every time I write about a man, it comes off stiff and somehow tasteless, but with a woman, it adds this...flare. Might be the way we look at things, but beauty's an abstract force that bears no witness. I like the mastery you imply in her actions; as though there's a scheme to these things. The topic is interesting, the format is interesting... Really got me thinking.

| Posted on 2016-04-09 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]

...she needs new flesh as hers is stripped from belly to back the perfect dish the baited barb all shiny bright loves who wish its sting goodnight...

| Posted on 2016-04-04 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]

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