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    Author: Narna
    Elite Ratio:    1.74 - 14/102/68
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    He.
    Wipes the slate clean.
    "Rome wasn't built in a day, but it burned in one".
    He had seen her ars-
    on; her way out.
    The back side of her;
    a cheek he didn't want to recognise.
    All the lies; a builder
    of hope; a
    Wrecking ball in disguise...
    "We tried. I cried."
    They feigned surprise
    When;
    Smoke filled the skies.

    She
    was not an architect.

    He
    was part of a human pyramid;
    with her at the top.




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      A love story to me that was bound to destruction from the start.
    The implication of Rome is spot-on, and the extra mentioning of Egyptian architecture is a sly detail; I greatly appreciate the allusions.
    | Posted on 2016-03-31 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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