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    dots Submission Name: Analog Tape Recorderdots
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    Author: Kael Fenshir
    ASL Info:    26 / M / That weird place
    Elite Ratio:    2.18 - 17/57/52
    Words: 245
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 622
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1661



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    Life's dark poem
    Forever singing in the black abyss
    Yearning for love and understanding
    Only to be rid of it once more

    It's a natural obsession
    Something to fear and love
    Objects to hold and covet
    High upon the ultimate summit

    I can't help myself
    Nor can I stop
    Fingertips start to feel numb
    Now I only wear gloves

    Because the house is burning
    With no one around
    I lie here by myself
    Wondering where it's all gone

    With cups and string I try to hear
    Blaring distortion from some netherworld
    Beyond space; beyond fear
    One lonely bear without any kin

    Anger rose up inside
    Swelling hate unlocked with pride
    You mocked me like a child
    Before I died in drought

    I am an empty lake
    With trash and discarded limbs
    Breaking down bones
    And eroded skin

    My conscious mind evaporates
    Like morning dew in July
    Only a few months later
    Did I feel what I did not see

    Solidarity made things clear for me
    And how I needed to be
    Don't ever apologize
    I know I'm the that is sorry

    I spoke to you last night
    Inside my little dream
    Where everyone had melting faces
    Hating, like sprinkles on ice cream

    Repetitious I have become
    Something like an endless dream
    You await death in eternal
    But please, please, open your eyes and see

    See what I have always seen




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