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    dots Submission Name: Morning parkdots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    26/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 136/243/156
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMorning parkdots
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    I walked through the woods you followed
    a fog hung over the molehills and the lake
    belied sea monsters stirring below
    sleeping in the murky depths.
    I almost felt your jolty walk echo back
    from my back – a cave of multitudes,
    there must be some Greek myth to fit this –
    crushing gravel, sharp intake
    of breath, but in fact there was
    no one.
    I walked over to the lake shore, red coat
    in dull light naked tree branches
    and last years leaves. I came out
    unscathed, almost cheerful --
    and there you were anyway
    walking towards me





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