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Author: expiring_touch
ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 139 /260 /173
Words: 59
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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sometimes you feel that piano isn’t enough
however lightly you touch the keys --
and I don’t need to see to know
that they are drenched.
people hung over the banisters, crawled
on top of the chairs but the silence
stretched that last note
off the edge
into the pit, where it still lies

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