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    dots Submission Name: Mr. Robertsondots
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    Author: Narna
    Elite Ratio:    1.73 - 14/102/70
    Words: 34
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsMr. Robertsondots
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    We highprophecise; spit lies; kill time;
    and it's murderous.
    First comes first; I, not you, or we, or family, but
    Me.
    Climb a tree,
    Scrape your knee.
    Count; one, two, free...
    Breathe.




    Submitted on 2016-03-30 00:43:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well i enjoyed it

    I resent the moralistic line "i, not you, or we..." But the rest falls together like a children's counting song, with a rather menacing undertone...
    | Posted on 2016-04-03 00:00:00 | by expiring_touch | [ Reply to This ]
      Sounds like a sociopath having an episode.
    I imagine a woman; chewing her nails maniacally and watching her child climb the tree despite her protests against it. The child scrapes her knee and the woman loses her mind; having known the result before it came.
    Having presumed correctly, she dissolves into the importance of herself.

    She'd walk away as her daughter cries.
    | Posted on 2016-03-31 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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