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    dots Submission Name: Man Eats Man Eats Worlddots

    Author: MyPeriodical
    ASL Info:    18/m/pr
    Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 288/229/264
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       I've wondered what limits my writing to what you see the majority of the time
    I try too hard to write with beauty rather than with ideas through which beauty shines

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    dotsMan Eats Man Eats Worlddots

    like a web
    our learnings pass
    through the knots of each thread

    every lesson be made
    recurring till it succeed

    before the wind, it breaks
    miss the skin to which it sticks
    rather, falls and dissipates...

    again, we weave
    again, the beginning

    like a spider,
    knit and pucker
    correct the corners
    so no one stretch further

    tie it together
    and groove to the center
    so it all become one body
    one teaching to abide by

    to feed off of;
    the net that make her catches.

    Submitted on 2016-04-03 18:23:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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