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    dots Submission Name: Against the Tidedots
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    Author: MaryMaryBeth
    Elite Ratio:    2.08 - 8/8/7
    Words: 48
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsAgainst the Tidedots
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    Thoughts swimming against the tide.
    Turning and swallowing.
    Roaring and spinning, endlessly.
    The saltiness permeates the air.
    Darkness is bleak before it mirrors.
    Breath. Breath. Breath.
    Oh God will I ever see again?
    Redemption clings like freedom.
    There is no escaping.




    Submitted on 2016-04-03 19:25:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Thank so much for adding your comments. Yes, I agree I should describe and explore those thoughts and feelings. So I just wrote this poem as a result of your comments.

    The Aftermath of an Illusion

    A conversation
    which is
    engulfed in a swirl
    between convenient truths and falsehoods
    appearing
    insidious and coy
    between soul and self
    intended to be
    private and public
    between good and evil
    and is often
    loud and silent
    between an elephant and a mule

    But the aftermath of an illusion is as real as an explosion from overseas.
    | Posted on 2016-04-09 00:00:00 | by MaryMaryBeth | [ Reply to This ]
      Sounds like the narrator is drowning in his/her own thoughts, but what are they of? The last two lines give the reader a peek into the meaning of it all and what they're feeling, but leaves off like a cliff-hanger at the end of an addicting movie.
    Those always piss me off.
    | Posted on 2016-04-09 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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