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    dots Submission Name: If He Had Beendots
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    Author: MyPeriodical
    ASL Info:    18/m/pr
    Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 288/229/264
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsIf He Had Beendots
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    If
    Is an incredible dimension where
    Nothing's happened yet.
    And no one knows what has it in substance...
    If
    Is a paradox that's never been beheld
    By hand or eye.
    Our fingers slip too easy
    On the slippery gloss
    Of porcelain glass.
    If
    Has no boundaries,
    No beginning and no end
    To which we beckon
    To which we bend.

    If only
    You knew that.




    Submitted on 2016-04-06 15:39:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the probing question of the word "If." However I like to see some concrete life experieces applied to the question "If" as it would help me imagine, visualize and see clearly how it applies to your life.
    | Posted on 2016-04-09 00:00:00 | by MaryMaryBeth | [ Reply to This ]


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