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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
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    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    The different relationships of knowing God.
    I am an ignoramous.
    I am an empty vessel.
    Like a dummy, you animate my body with life. I am born, then.born again, and finally alive, a little higher on the food chain...I am like a sheep now. You are my shepard. You feed me as I cannot feed myself, you guide me as I do not know.the way, you defeat the enemy as I am no match for.the wolf that plots to devour me.
    And as I come to know you more, as I trust You and recognize your face, I am your child. I have free reign in your kingdom, even when I mess up. When I spend all my money, you give me.more, when I waste all my time you come to my rescue. Even.if I dont obey you or take your advice you love me.unconditionally. You help me mature along the many pitfalls of life. Now.I realize I am your friend, we can laugh together, play together, you give me.command over evil, saying, go ahead take this one. I have privilege and power. And finally, I am desperate.to know you in thr most sacred way of all. The way my heart yearns and lusts after who knows what, the way I have this void in me, fill me, romance me, date me, touch me all over and awake me to the intimacye and pleasure.you have granted me, I am your bride.And your.cherished one, I want to know you this way.




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      Hey Jazzi girl,
    You have some great things going here. The allegory and language is great, but it looks like it was moved from somewhere and lost its structure? Reminds me of things that happen when I post from my phone.
    I love the passionate content and the faithful relationship. It reminds me not to become complacent in my own. New believers are sometimes ridiculed by those who think they have always lived in the faith. I find that maybe they do not quite understand what faith is. The pieces help me look through fresh eyes. It's the difference of a couple that has been married for many years and takes love for granted, and a love that is newly established, where every aspect is still cherished. There is much to be said for the freshness of the new and the unshakability of the old.
    | Posted on 2016-05-12 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      Whoa. Lots of unusual grammar issues here, so I presume you were just jotting this down as your thoughts flew by.
    I'm a sucker for allusions, so this is nice. It makes me wanna read back on old passages that were included in my childhood Bible. They seemed a whole lot less credible then.
    If I may ask, what state of mind were you in when you wrote this?
    | Posted on 2016-04-09 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]
      He's a highly polygamous fella my friend. Consider how many nuns (brides of christ) there are already.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2016-04-07 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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