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    dots Submission Name: Dirty Piece of Meatdots
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    Author: 1tkfyl
    Elite Ratio:    1.62 - 1/5/2
    Words: 51
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsDirty Piece of Meatdots
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    Aches and Pains will only Gain
    a greater Self-Esteem.
    And some day soon, and not far off
    you will become the Queen.
    Though strain and strife turmoil through life
    and broken breams we know.
    We do love you, no where you are
    and wait 'till you come home.




    Submitted on 2016-04-08 17:08:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The first half seemedlike a woman forgettingher pain through sex. Second half seems more about her losing herself. After seeing the title i assumed it was going to be a little dirtier but it was still a good write!
    | Posted on 2016-04-10 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]
      no, I should have added the word "matter'.
    But the word above it should have been Dream.
    And yes she does switch, it is nauseating at times
    And I hope she finds stability too.
    Thx. I need to proof read better next time.
    | Posted on 2016-04-10 00:00:00 | by 1tkfyl | [ Reply to This ]
      Did you mean "know" at that 7th line?

    So my understanding is that this is about a woman who's mulling over the pain she's overcome + what she is currently overcoming now. She promises herself that this will have a positive outcome, so I can't help but take it as her point of view switches between optimism and pessimism frequently.

    I hope she finds that balance at the end of it all.
    | Posted on 2016-04-09 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]

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