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    dots Submission Name: Love for The Farmdots
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    Author: MaryMaryBeth
    Elite Ratio:    2.08 - 8/8/7
    Words: 192
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsLove for The Farmdots
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    I love being on the farm
    for
    its morning dawns, cooing doves, ringing alarms, two butter sticks softening in a saucer dish next to an old percolator, and the fresh Folger's coffee brewing in an idle kitchen

    I love being on the farm
    for
    playing in the hay loft, feeling excitement surrounded by feral kittens and running rats, and day dreaming of a plan to befriend them

    I love being on the farm
    for
    getting lost in the three foot tall alfalfa pastures, seeing my dog in the distance, roll happily in sweet cow pies

    I love being on the farm
    for
    swatting tails, sticky pink and warm tongues, and kind eyes peering sideways from the narrow stalls

    I love being on the farm
    for
    partaking in the small county fairs, believing in those principled Lutheran’s sermons and tasting the Summer’s sweet year-end ice cream socials.

    I love being on the farm
    for
    the memories of my grandparents’ larger-than-life stories, their undying love for the land and their animals, and mostly for, the seeds they have forever sown in me.




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      This sounds really great the only thing I would change is repeating "I love being on the farm" again and again i feel like it takes away from the flow.
    | Posted on 2016-05-11 00:00:00 | by ilovepuppies | [ Reply to This ]


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