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    dots Submission Name: Indulgencesdots
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    Author: MyPeriodical
    ASL Info:    18/m/pr
    Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 288/229/264
    Words: 48
    Class/Type: Haiku/Misc
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    Bytes: 396



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    dotsIndulgencesdots
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    Attachment Speaks

    Plunging to my feet
    Layers of sea water frill
    Sighing swarms of krill.

    Through Thirst

    His drunken blood runs
    Religiously it becomes
    Doused with any Spirit.

    &

    Immediate Extortion

    Pointing of fingers
    Mine descend until I swim
    No longer sinking.




    Submitted on 2016-04-09 16:17:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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