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    dots Submission Name: did i ever matter? dots
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    Author: LonelyNight
    Elite Ratio:    0.19 - 0/2/2
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/You left me
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    Did I ever matter?

    Did you ever really care?

    You promised you would always be here

    How come i don't see you anymore?

    You said i was your all

    How come now i feel like i'm nothing at all?

    I was always embraced in warmth

    How come now i'm frozen?

    I was at the top of your list

    How come my name is not there anymore?

    It seemed like it would be forever

    How come now it feels like we never exited?

    Did I ever matter?

    Did you ever really care?





    Submitted on 2016-04-10 23:11:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I've been in the place you were when you were writing this. And it is hard to put the feelings into words. Sometimes you try, but no phrase seems to encompass how your heart is aching...your confusion...your loneliness. This is a good start, but I know you're hurting more than this can express. In terms of a poem about a broken heart, this is kind of a lukewarm effort. Keep writing. The words will come easier, they will flow together to form the right feelings, and you will be more able to express everything.

    It's a good effort. My favorite line:

    "I was always embraced in warmth"
    | Posted on 2016-05-07 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

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