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    dots Submission Name: Tears of an angeldots
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    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    32/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 153/95/116
    Words: 223
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       31 years... 20 years of unhappiness takes a toll...I give in.


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    Drop my sword to the ground; Knee deep under the soil of defeat,
    Give in my dear for there is noone to love you anymore...
    Do you still want to fight; I ask, and my heart screams with silence.

    The cold wind blows through the bludgeoned battle ground,
    with snow covering up the lifeless me.
    Never did a body breath with a deal soul,
    and so did the countless wars take a toll on his last breath.

    Is it hard for you to hold my hand?
    Is it hard for you to wipe my tears away?
    Is it hard for you to comfort me?
    Is it really hard for someone to love me...?

    I give in my dear God
    for this angel cried too long...
    for this soul to be not blessed with happiness...
    for this life in emptiness...
    for so did I hand over to you...
    my life, my happiness and my dream.

    I tried and I will try till this body breathes.
    For a misguided perfectionist hears in space...
    For a hopeless romantic colours being blind...
    For a curse that never seems to end...

    And so did my tears speak those words as they drop from my eyes to let this life end.

    31 years and counting...




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