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    dots Submission Name: Bluedots

    Author: C. Starr
    ASL Info:    35/yesplz/State of denial
    Elite Ratio:    4.22 - 130/196/68
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Take me on your journey of pain.
    I’ll go along.
    Skipping, happily.
    Unaware of the clouds forming.
    Yes, darling…
    Give me sparkling dark blue tears from my eyes & from the sky.
    Glittery & blackened,
    Darkened by the deceit.
    It’s a superhero color but you’re the villain in my dreams.
    Forever captive in precious unknown metals,
    That piece of my heart that wants you.
    A particle of a gem formed by the pressure of promises.
    The fraction of my soul which is eternally seeking your truth.

    Submitted on 2016-04-23 15:49:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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