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    dots Submission Name: Of seeds we planted.dots
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    Author: Chelebel
    Elite Ratio:    2.18 - 53/169/180
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsOf seeds we planted.dots
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    Imperfect circles drawn by
    Natures natural growth
    To which we all can see
    the naked truth, simplicity.

    Circles in the sky
    Circles in our youth
    Of seeds we planted
    Long ago, tried and true.

    Round and round we go
    Merry go round my soul
    Inside a light with little fright
    And laughter from the nuse.

    Go ahead and try to strangle
    That knot is specially tied
    So as you pull the looser it gets
    My breath unscathed, my life alive.

    I live these days with little strife
    My heart is filled with joy
    It's usually an outside force
    That will upheaval the knife
    that's forced.




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