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    dots Submission Name: To the Traindots
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    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 75/182/213
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsTo the Traindots
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    Beyond thoughts of good and evil,
    Platonic musings;
    fear of punishment in sin
    and cries of the "fair" man.

    A world view unique---
    ---to thoughts
    ---to dreams,
    art and visions that only one,
    can truly see.

    Searching for a sense of freedom,
    to find a place.
    A box to be locked away,
    from the tears dead men wept;
    from dread the shovel spreads.

    All must depart from this,
    our great cliché!
    Struggle to keep up,
    so we can shove our way
    into Hell.
    Unless you found hope today
    and missed the train...




    Submitted on 2016-04-28 20:03:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is true and yet extremely depressing if read over and over again. In fact, Let's keep hope instead of missing the train because at the end of it, none of us really enjoy chasing anything. We want it easy, and this, it sounds so very hard. Accept the fate now, otherwise the years will seem long and unkempt. Find those keys to unlock that box, so those tears can be released and not locked.
    | Posted on 2016-05-24 00:00:00 | by Chelebel | [ Reply to This ]
      Observations of the deluded mind, I'd say.
    This strongly agree with my theory that the primal man instinctively seeks a superior if not superior himself.
    There is extremism in nature; only a certain type of person will attract a neutral, but those are usually born through fate and fate alone.

    I like the way you make a solid argument on behalf of the individual conscious mind. We can't be one if some think that they are all.

    I may look at some things from a different direction, but your perspective has some qualities that may interchange with mine.
    | Posted on 2016-05-16 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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