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    dots Submission Name: Elagabalus pt. Idots
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    Author: MyPeriodical
    ASL Info:    18/m/pr
    Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 288/229/264
    Words: 29
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsElagabalus pt. Idots
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    He will dip his head back
    gently
    Akin to a doll with no leverage over
    gravity

    My hand will hold him
    but he will not hold my hand.




    Submitted on 2016-04-29 11:58:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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