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    dots Submission Name: Saddiedots
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    Author: Chelebel
    Elite Ratio:    2.14 - 51/166/172
    Words: 464
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Go with me. To that imaginary playground
    Where the sand clings to your feet
    While you play Mozart because I am near.
    The piano would get really dirty.
    And I'm not quite sure if your toes could stretch
    Enough to hit each note properly.

    Go with me to that merry go land
    Where the sand plays Minuet in G on your feet.
    And the inner child sings on the swings.

    Go with me to that two humped camel
    Back where my memories are innocent and free
    Next to the tracks
    whose trains terrified me.

    A place where I would run and play freely.
    A place where innocence never left me.
    A place where my heart will always be
    A child in a swing swaddled in the excitement of
    The ups and downs as I pumped my feet, vigorously.
    Hoping, to jump from my seat and land on my feet.

    Which I was that girl.
    Jumping from as high as I could
    hoping that maybe even
    The swing set would tilt
    from four feet to one.

    Go with me to the place next to the tracks
    Where the two humped camel has your back.
    The slides can be greased that's ok with me
    So long as we can descend on our bellies.

    Go with me to that place in the sand
    Where our inner child comes out again.
    Where there is no need to hold back our
    Feelings because it's painted all over our faces.

    Go with me to that place in the sand
    Where the camel is a junkie for joy in this land.

    You see this camel he is timeless you know,
    He has given many rides to children as so.
    His heart his purpose filled with glee
    Because everyday he allows the children to be
    Whom they want and fairytales flee their mouths
    You see. Cause this camel he is timeless.
    Come ride with me. In that place between the two humps
    In the valley. Meet me there where all your fears reside and all you
    Want to do is hide from the truth of all truths and the lies of all lies.
    Swing away to your surprise. Come with me in between to the place
    Where we all need to feel free. Where the sand begins a new life
    Each time, the tides decide to rise.

    Go with me to that place in my memories
    Where our inner child plays and we are happy.

    Let yourself be free with the love from your heart;
    The salt from the sea. The dark of the room,
    the sense of your essence; as you kissed me.








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