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    dots Submission Name: Words shattered tomorrow's yesterday left bledots
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    Author: jaycee
    ASL Info:    44/F/ Texas
    Elite Ratio:    5.27 - 2626/1259/187
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsWords shattered tomorrow's yesterday left bledots
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    Heart pieces mourn
    the advent of could have beens
    cutting if only
    with dull machete.

    Bloodied mess--
    congealing in soupy
    puddles of memory.

    Maggot words
    filter through
    consuming deadened flesh,
    revealing jagged wound edge.

    Carrion lines
    Peck, peck
    peck
    swallowing bitter larvae
    before butterfly thoughts morph.

    Holes
    gaping holes
    pulsing putrid potholes
    decorating as minefields.
    Where are the hounds?

    Avoidance,
    a futile act,
    only clots the blood
    until next words read.

    Some hearts never
    beat
    as one.




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    ||| Comments |||
      A look in this direction is chilling and your words absolutely invoked the emotion of a violent raw atmosphere.
    Reality can say whatever she wants so long as it's true.
    I feel like you are speaking for her quite well here and I am left stunned by this.

    Thanks for sharing.
    I was particularly moved by the bloodied mess and congealed soupy puddles of memory part.

    Jaycee that was hardcore.
    | Posted on 2016-05-17 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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