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Words shattered tomorrow's yesterday left ble

Author: jaycee
ASL Info:    44/F/ Texas
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Words: 83
Class/Type: Poetry /Dark
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Words shattered tomorrow's yesterday left ble

Heart pieces mourn
the advent of could have beens
cutting if only
with dull machete.

Bloodied mess--
congealing in soupy
puddles of memory.

Maggot words
filter through
consuming deadened flesh,
revealing jagged wound edge.

Carrion lines
Peck, peck
swallowing bitter larvae
before butterfly thoughts morph.

gaping holes
pulsing putrid potholes
decorating as minefields.
Where are the hounds?

a futile act,
only clots the blood
until next words read.

Some hearts never
as one.

Submitted on 2016-05-12 11:07:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  A look in this direction is chilling and your words absolutely invoked the emotion of a violent raw atmosphere.
Reality can say whatever she wants so long as it's true.
I feel like you are speaking for her quite well here and I am left stunned by this.

Thanks for sharing.
I was particularly moved by the bloodied mess and congealed soupy puddles of memory part.

Jaycee that was hardcore.
| Posted on 2016-05-17 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]

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