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    dots Submission Name: Weeklydots

    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    26/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 136/243/156
    Words: 41
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    No extra blanks between
    to document the last few takes
    -my blinking glassy eyes- hay fever
    or cold, or one more
    razed emotion-
    shall pass along the bend of space
    I'd spin around
    at this finality

    Submitted on 2016-05-13 05:00:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like that this poem (line by line) cannot be anticipated. In that way it twists: and it twists, keeping a live-action.

    Right there....
    bottle that shit up.
    | Posted on 2016-05-23 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]

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