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    dots Submission Name: Weeklydots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 137/243/158
    Words: 41
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 712
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    dotsWeeklydots
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    No extra blanks between
    to document the last few takes
    -my blinking glassy eyes- hay fever
    or cold, or one more
    razed emotion-
    shall pass along the bend of space
    I'd spin around
    gasp
    at this finality






    Submitted on 2016-05-13 05:00:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like that this poem (line by line) cannot be anticipated. In that way it twists: and it twists, keeping a live-action.

    Right there....
    bottle that shit up.
    | Posted on 2016-05-23 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]


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