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    dots Submission Name: Someday's Tomorrowdots
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    Author: Rhythmal
    Elite Ratio:    2.4 - 29/50/47
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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       I'm not entirely sure how I feel about the flow of this one.


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    dotsSomeday's Tomorrowdots
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    These trees will burn and fall away
    And God won't shed a tear
    The seas will rise and the earth will die
    Not tomorrow or today
    Though we've yet to see or hear their calls
    Their laughter, or their cries
    Our children and their own for sure
    Will bear the weight of our disgrace and fall
    And have this and not much more;
    The sky above, the sea below,
    And the raft on which they lie.




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      I don't know how I feel about it either, but I do know that this is the only poem that I've read on this site approaching the topic of climate change/everything that revolves around it.
    So, although the rhyme scheme is a little off when it comes to structure, I think that, when spoken aloud, this poem can make a great impact on the audience. Now, would it make an even greater impact with a little change? Depends on how you revise it. I think it's worth a try, but all-in-all it's worth the read and definitely worth understanding.
    | Posted on 2016-05-23 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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