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Summer


Author: Rhythmal
Elite Ratio:    2.4 - 29 /50 /47
Words: 25
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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This one could probably use a couple more lines to lead into it, any ideas?


Summer



Bright Summer lads
Dancing along these
Bright Summer days
Wasting their youth
As only the young can
In all manners appropriate




Submitted on 2016-05-14 13:42:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I would suggest some examples of what this youth is doing during summer. Pokemon go?
| Posted on 2016-08-25 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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