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    dots Submission Name: Elagabalus pt. IIdots
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    Author: MyPeriodical
    ASL Info:    18/m/pr
    Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 288/229/264
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 725
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    Description:
       "My lover is pure in most respects,
    but I tarnish him with my intentions
    like treasure; I pretend that I have found him
    and thus, he is mine."

    In this series it could be either the narrator or the subject that is perceived as Elagabalus...
    So. Make that interpretation for yourself.


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    dotsElagabalus pt. IIdots
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    Even in close proximity,

    heat transferring from our bodies seemingly
    to the room

    we heave, as though in need -

    turn to face one another and see

    that there is only a reason to hide, that of just the sweet melancholy

    travelling between us like a meteorite, skidding across the skies;

    Burning up, it turns to ashes and bathes us in black,
    but he glows white.

    Loyalty and faith grow like a sprung field of flowers in his eyes;
    Dark, brown and alive.

    Lips stained like a pregnant shade of chai
    perhaps with his blood and perhaps with mine.




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